August 27, 2010

I tried... yet cried...





I frantically raced,
But it caught up with me,
With a wry smile on its face,
Enjoying the fear in me...

I tried to be brave,
Yet started crying...

The jaws of dark,
Stood menacing and bold,
Slicing me with its look,
So severe and cold...

I tried to be brave,
Yet started crying...

I battled from its grasp,
But it held me even tight,
Begged for it to let me go,
But it wouldnt budge from its stance...

I tried to be brave,
Yet started crying...

Like a prisoner i was held,
Almost tortured to death,
Cried for my life,
When there came a ray of light...

I was released and relieved!
And yet... I didnt stop crying...!

14 Snowflakes:

Prabodh said...

Nice one yaar!!..par itna emotional wala

Namita said...

@Prabodh - I wasnt really expecting anyone to comment on this poem ;) But thanks to you! :D This was a situational poem :) and hence its up in my blog!

Devasena said...

cool.. what was that ray of light. Even if you dont expect us to comment, its our duty to dirty your blog..

Jus kiddin..truly lovely..

Namita said...

@Devka - Are you really asking me what that ray of light is? Errr... Guess me trying to be poetic is just not working out :D but thanks for the comment akka!! Mwah!

Viji said...

wow nami! loved it.. loved it babe...
The lines that stole my heart:

"The jaws of dark,
Stood menacing and bold,
Slicing me with its look,
So severe and cold..."

"I was released and relieved!
And yet... I didnt stop crying...!"

Poetry I never try to relate with personal life, coz most of the times its imaginative, adventure and unrealistic... People know me as a cheerful person, but most of my poems are about pain, anguish and release. I use these feel in poems coz it gives nice edge to the poem :) well done Nami! wanna read a lot of your poems...

Namita said...

@Viji - Gosh! Getting a comment as flattery as this and that too from a poet like you is an honour! I am so flattered!! This will keep me going!! Thanks Vij! Hugs and Mwah! :*

Aishwarya said...

Kollalo Videon! Enikyu ishtapettu! :D
Hugs and Mwah! :D

Priya... said...

wow! that's lovely nami... you are joining the fleet of poets good :) Keep writing!!

Namita said...

@Aa - Thanks Aaa!! Didnt think you will read it! Thanks for liking it! Mwah :*
@Priya - Eeeee... You really think so? Still yet to gain that confidence Priya... Thanks though!

Ram Kasi said...

when is ur next post???

Namita said...

@Ram - First let me know what you think about this posting and then I shall let you know when my next posting is :)

Viji said...

ram.. now I told Nami what i felt abt her post, lemme ask her... "when is ur next post???"

Devasena Hariharan said...

so when are u going to post AM'bitious'.. I know its difficult for a lazy pig like u to think abt that word..

Nevertheless I dont mind a post saying u have sky rocketing plans.

Let not the earth open and swallow us both for uttering such a big lie..

Namita said...

@Viji,Devka: I did my next posting and even published it but it came in different font style and colour so deleted it and am waiting for some of my lazy bum friends to help me re-solve it and there is nobody to help me :( !!! Will post it soon!!

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